tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1015645269607993268.post5861087319102236885..comments2023-06-15T10:30:47.121-05:00Comments on Stories with Sophie: Indecisive (20/31)Deb Dayhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00861392500601183208noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1015645269607993268.post-30977528182785380692012-03-21T19:59:42.130-05:002012-03-21T19:59:42.130-05:00I want to get my high school kids back writing poe...I want to get my high school kids back writing poems that make use of space on the page. Thanks for the inspiration, Deb! :)Paulhttp://birdsandtreesofthemind.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1015645269607993268.post-91145756583315543602012-03-20T20:47:41.168-05:002012-03-20T20:47:41.168-05:00I took Ruth's advice and I read the poem out l...I took Ruth's advice and I read the poem out loud. Fabulous. I liked the way the poem looked on the page. It looks like rain bouncing too and fro on our sidewalks and driveways. It sounded like rain with its split, splat, pitter, patter. Refreshing.Cathyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08233792477358685156noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1015645269607993268.post-3356219317794878362012-03-20T20:45:04.909-05:002012-03-20T20:45:04.909-05:00Ruth is right! This sounds like a children's ...Ruth is right! This sounds like a children's book. It is so fun to get to the "nothing" at the end of the onomatopoeia. This indecisive rain is what I like least about spring.Christy Rush-Levinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15581876400990779210noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1015645269607993268.post-62309187582345738292012-03-20T20:38:34.109-05:002012-03-20T20:38:34.109-05:00Love the visual image of this poem and how the wor...Love the visual image of this poem and how the words are spread out like uneven and indecisive spots of rain. You are so creative, Deb!Mardiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12237463317290624819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1015645269607993268.post-60498911909811863532012-03-20T19:50:22.275-05:002012-03-20T19:50:22.275-05:00Your poem reflects the weather here today too. (L...Your poem reflects the weather here today too. (Love the phrase indecisive rain.) I felt those words were coming as a result of the weather we had here today too. The weather just can't seem to make up its mind, can it?Stacey Shubitzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17903206728640184043noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1015645269607993268.post-80837672540850521022012-03-20T19:27:05.810-05:002012-03-20T19:27:05.810-05:00What can I say, cool! You rock!What can I say, cool! You rock!elsiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01348895330633879894noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1015645269607993268.post-74498905122774929082012-03-20T18:44:07.612-05:002012-03-20T18:44:07.612-05:00Enjoyed how you organized the words on the page an...Enjoyed how you organized the words on the page and the repetition of the sound phrases!Danahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18011661904689079860noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1015645269607993268.post-69472943194009847172012-03-20T17:38:28.832-05:002012-03-20T17:38:28.832-05:00I love the way your words "splat" on the...I love the way your words "splat" on the page like random raindrops. You captured the feeling of "on-and-off-again" rain perfectly! I like the fact that you were determined to write a poem about the spring rain, and you did so even though it wasn't the kind of rain you had imagined!JenniferMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09603450967368808356noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1015645269607993268.post-21667382851521217222012-03-20T15:31:34.755-05:002012-03-20T15:31:34.755-05:00Wonderful play. I can hear the rain and see you a...Wonderful play. I can hear the rain and see you and Chloe dance to its music. Glad you had a good place to publish and share your creation.Tamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12535989955846532310noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1015645269607993268.post-90397629890670417372012-03-20T13:43:50.473-05:002012-03-20T13:43:50.473-05:00I just followed Ruth's advice and did. I love ...I just followed Ruth's advice and did. I love the way those last few lines made my eyes dance around the page!Tarahttp://tmsteach.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1015645269607993268.post-54475176486082009762012-03-20T12:41:41.426-05:002012-03-20T12:41:41.426-05:00Thanks Ruth!Thanks Ruth!Deb Dayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00861392500601183208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1015645269607993268.post-86304759604079101662012-03-20T11:12:45.083-05:002012-03-20T11:12:45.083-05:00Fun play with words. I've been realizing how m...Fun play with words. I've been realizing how much this word play with poetry makes me happy. I just HAD to read your poem out loud. It's even more fun this way. :)<br /><br />I highly recommend EVERYONE read this one aloud. <br /><br />RuthRuth Ayreshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09691244229499772525noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1015645269607993268.post-39525593746800457522012-03-20T10:01:19.060-05:002012-03-20T10:01:19.060-05:00Absolutely you may use it. ThanksAbsolutely you may use it. ThanksDeb Dayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00861392500601183208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1015645269607993268.post-76836494923717242582012-03-20T08:51:55.546-05:002012-03-20T08:51:55.546-05:00What a wonderful poem! Love the stanza about hangi...What a wonderful poem! Love the stanza about hanging the clothes up/taking the clothes down/... such a teeter totter kind of day. I also love the form of the poem with the spattering of words like the spattering of rain. May I use it for a mentor text?Tracyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06354083359235768995noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1015645269607993268.post-6084352385370635892012-03-20T08:49:46.023-05:002012-03-20T08:49:46.023-05:00This comment has been removed by the author.Tracyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06354083359235768995noreply@blogger.com